Communicating in Forums
Essay by review • July 17, 2011 • Essay • 369 Words (2 Pages) • 1,342 Views
He could have avoided making the mistakes by going over his response first before he posted it. Whenever I am done with a certain assignment I proof read it and ask my wife or a family member if they could proof read it for me before I post it. Whenever a person proof reads your work of course they are going to give feedback. I take whatever feedback I get and use that to better make any adjustments to my assignments. For one he should have not said it in a sexist tone at the end of his statement he said and I quote “I saw a business lady”. To me the correct way to phrase that would be business woman. I found through my experiences of life that woman don’t particularly like to be called lady. It just shows that you have no respect for the other sex. He also stated he was going to brush up on his etiquette for the some of the good old boys at the top, he automatically assumes that the people on top are men. There are an equal amount of woman “at the top” in businesses as men. Another way he could have avoided his mistakes is do research of woman in business. He would have found a substantial amount of woman in businesses that are highly successful. His whole response has at least five sexist remarks that are not appropriate to any person. Another I can point out is that he did not quote her on her tips she gave. All he did was take what was not his and used them for his own gain in success. What he should have done was give her notoriety when he used her tips. He had no blatant respect for her giving up her tips and using them for himself. He also should have given her name in his response, as well as to his managers. I suggest in the future he should proof read his work, get a second opinion from another person and think things through thoroughly before writing down his responses.
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